idle muse

People like Paolini because he functions at their mental level (i.e., zero) That actually made me laugh in a public library. Now people are looking at me all funny :D

Short and poignant. Very good. His eyes liquid pools of color, hers softened in return as she melted into him and they both faded away together as the final brilliant ...

I liked it, but is quite difficult to read. I think it would be better in traditional spaced paragraphs. Oh, and you used shrieked twice in the prologue, and spelt ...

I loved the description, particularly Luna's. However, the dialogue needs work. KJ has already gone through that. The other point is that 'Mowragroafs' seems like a comedy name. It is ...

I liked it. I think you could stand to take out one or two of the commas and conjunctions, some of the sentences drag on a bit. While this probably ...

He turned as a large battalion seemed eager for battle, but was unable to fight because of their comrades before them It might just be me, but I would rewrite ...